@Marshall A few of those points were ones I ended ...

@Marshall A few of those points were ones I ended up having to discard as this ran massively long, so yes, i agree wholeheartedly.

@jvstin Y'know, the instinct is that you don't need to be as terse in an online setting since there's more time to be leisurely in your reading, but I've found that unless the describing writer is quite gifted, it just results in large blocks of impenetrable text. So, at least from my perspective, you might be able to loosen up a _little_, but not much.